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help me revise this paragraph plz?
As I was recovering from distress that Sunday, my mom ladled a crude brown-colored broth into a small bowl. Reacting to the soup’s fishy odor and dried seahorses that were used, I pinched my nose and shook my head. My mom took the bowl away, added a single dried prune and simmered it in a sauce pan for fifteen minutes. Afterwards, she poured the modified soup back into my bowl.
shorten it if possible....tense, wording, improvement in general
While recovering from my distress, Mom prepared dried seahorse broth for me. When she offered me a bowl of the fishy smelling stuff, I recoiled into the couch. Wisely, she poured it back in the pan, added a dried prune, and simmered it for 15 minutes. Then she served me a steaming hot bowl of delicious soup.
Best wishes,
English Student
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